Sunday, June 2, 2013

Final formal polish letter

Dear Special Olympics Power lifting team,


Over the years, masculinity has had a variety of depictions from time to time. There is a big culture difference of masculinity in real life and popular culture. In real life, being masculine is about being yourself and caring about your family. However, in pop culture, masculinity is about being macho, flexing to impress people, doing something reckless and dangerous, eating meat, pumping iron, etc. There is also the way masculinity is depicted in movies, like being full of muscle and having a lot of guns. I wish to say that masculinity being expressed in pop culture can become a problem if it is not addressed immediately. If concerns like these are left unchecked, they will get out of control and cause a lot of misconceptions about what true masculinity really is.

The research I used for this claim is the Yes! Magazine article The Hazards of Manhood. In the article, people claim that true manhood lies in toughness, power, and competitiveness. I also read that the working man's desire to appear strong would compel them to lift more weight, continue working despite pain, and forgo safety measures. Most people claim that playing it safe will make them look weak. The article also states that the media exploits mens' bodies to instill in them the desire to prove themselves as real men and make themselves appear stronger. I also think that the article makes a very good point about what they say about true manhood and its problems. An example of such a dangerous following would be competing in the Mr. Universe muscle modeling contests.

The claims I wish to point out are that manhood doesn't have to be exploited. I mean, for years, people have been convinced by the media through billboard advertisements, health magazines, workout equipment commercials, or even beer commercials. Men that follow these false messages tend to hop on a bandwagon without seeing who's behind the wheel until it's too late. Most of those people that go on this bandwagon are usually the loud, angry and stupid. I think that we should wise up and discover our masculinity in our own way We should also come up with our own definitions of masculine and feminine. I also feel that achieving true manhood lies within. People just need to find a way to unleash it. An example of such a thing is when the article says that "Our goal should be to create a world that requires neither John Henrys nor G.I Joes" (The Hazards of Manhood) (Oct. 2012).

The hazards of manhood can be avoided if men don't buy into what people say. They can also avoid the ads they see on T.V or on billboards. They should also avoid how manhood is depicted in movies or video games. Manhood in pop culture can also be avoided if people read less comic books involving muscularity. I also think people should avoid advertisements involving T.V dinners (i.e Hungry Man). T.V dinners like these just turn out to be soggy slabs of meat. People think they'll be tough to eat one of these. How ever, I think they shouldn't buy into these T.V dinners. They also should think carefully about the advertisements for weight lifting equipment or dietary supplements. Most guys think that using protein shakes or muscle powder during their workouts help them bulk up the fastest. I feel that people like that are too gullible and should be smart about the choices they make in trying to prove their manhood. I hope this little letter can reach out to you and broaden your minds. Thank you.


Sincerely, Riley Patterson

Works cited: Schwalbe, Michael The Hazards of Manhood Yes! Magazine. Oct. 30th, 2012.

1 comment:

  1. Great argument here. Your point that masculinity can be exploited by society/media is a very important one. Also, I can see that you did a good job using revision to improve the clarity in your writing. Incorporating research in support of your claim can be tricky, but you did a good job with the article you used, however, one more source would have raised your score. Overall good work Riley. It was a pleasure having you in class. I'm glad we made it even though we had a tough start, I think we both learned so much this semester from each other. Thanks for all of your important contributions to our writing community.
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